Bk7253's CP Application.

Out Of Character

What is your average total play time on our server?: About close to a hour, and I just love this server!

What makes you want to join the force?: I never have been a CP, So i really would love to be a CP and protect city 17.

Have you been on the MPF force on any other server? If so, what rank did you reach?: No.
 
What is your experience on HL2RP as a whole?: Its about Role-Playing and making it fun!

15 line RP example as a CCA unit.

i5.7253=Me  

i4.7680=Partner             

i5.7253 is walking alongside i4.7680.   

i4.7680 says:" Have you seen the new mayor?"  

i5.7253 Notices a rebel in the alley-way with another civillian.
 
i5.7253 Unclips his stunbaton from his belt, with electric sparks flying off. 

i5.7253 Says: "Look!" i4.7680 Looks over, and sees the rebel too.

i4.7680 says: "10-107. There is a suspicious figure, Looks Anti-Civilian." i5.7680 alongside i4.7680 both run to the alley.

The Rebel Says: "Do you hate the Combine?"

The Civilian says: "Ye-" The coversation is cut-off by the CP Walking in the alley-way.

i5.7253 Says: "Both of you, Wall!"  i4.7680 Says: "I got the rebel." The two get on the wall, the rebel resisting.

i5.7253 says: "Apply." to the civilian. The civilian applies, And is Deducted 5 points For rebel contact. 

i4.7680 Says: "Im going to take the Rebel back to the Nexus."

i5.7253 Says: "Roger." i4.7680 Says:"You stay on patrol."
 
i5.7253 Nods as i4.7680 walks off to the Nexus, Dragging the knocked-out Rebel.

In-Character

Name: Chase Kimmet

Age: 23

In-Game Description:Black Hair | Blue Eyes | Brown Shoes | Blue long-Sleeved Shirt | Blue Denim Jeans | White Tag Says "7253" |

Concise Backstory (2 paragraphs, 4 lines each): I never thought the alien threat would take over earth in 7 hours. My family and I were scared to death but we managed a way to make it out. So, after the 7 Hour War, New cities were founded. New types of aliens as well, Called "The Combine". I thought They werent so bad after all and I thought about joining. 

My family and I Moved to City 45, it was Great! Untill, there was a rebel attack on the RDT, Then The Apartments, Then the Nexus. They almost Destroyed the Nexus, But they destroyed the RDT and The apartments, Along with my family... The MPF were too stirred on trying to stop the rebels, so i managed to sneak out of the city. After that was a long journey, I couldnt find a thing out in the scary world. But i found city 17. And City 17 found me. Once I entered, it was a busy day I noticed. Everyone stopped with what they were doing and stared at me. One citizen says:"Who's that?" Two CP walk up to him. The one on the left says: "Apply." I say: "M-My Name is Chase Kimmet. M-My ID is #27473." The CP says: "Hmm... How'd you get here?" I say: "I-I escaped from the city." The CP's look at eachother. The one on the right says: "Why did you escape, Now?" I say: "T-There was a rebel attack." The CP on the left says: "You fled for saftey, Right?" I say: "Y-Yes, I-I did." The CP Says: "Ok, Welcome to City 17." I say: "Wait, R-Really?" The CP says: "Yes! Dont make me change my mind..." The Two Units go back to patrol the busy Area. And everyone went back to there daily routines. I sighed. I say: "This'll do just fine, I Hope." About a month later, I decide i wanted to Join the MPF Because i dont want ANYONE to exprience what happen to me in City 45. I hope my Anxiousness doesnt effect me on duty.

Motivation For Joining: To keep the industrial district safe from what happend in My past experiences.

Your RP examples and backstory are somewhat lackluster.
However, I'm fine with accepting you as long as you improve.
You have my +support.

I might fix it up a bit.

The big problem I'm seeing with the server is the complete and utter lack of fear RP, on both sides. Rebels and CCA. A regular i4 would not treat killing somebody like another day at the office. Your IC reason for joining is completely void, "Killing the rebels" The CCA would administer a 10-103M test just for saying that. Not to mention that your backstory is 5 lines, not the required 8. As it stands currently. -Support

Soap! wrote:The big problem I'm seeing with the server is the complete and utter lack of fear RP, on both sides. Rebels and CCA. A regular i4 would not treat killing somebody like another day at the office. Your IC reason for joining is completely void, "Killing the rebels" The CCA would administer a 10-103M test just for saying that. Not to mention that your backstory is 5 lines, not the required 8. As it stands currently. -Support

Jesus christ these pictures are fuckin small

You are missing lines on your RP example and your backstory. Until then, it gives off the impression you didn't try. -Support

I have updated it. Just to "Fix it up".

Shabby, but not TOOOOO shabby. +Support

The roleplay example feels very stilted, given that they immediately assume the guy is a rebel. Was he wearing armor in the open? Why would he do that? Why would he openly ask if a citizen hates the Combine? Also, what does the unit mean by 'mayor'? There are no more mayors. You are also still two lines short of a full RP example.

As for the backstory, it feels more like it would belong as an alternative RP example and barely qualifies as a backstory.

One final note of concern is how little you've been present on the server that I've seen. Given that it's easy for time zones to restrict our potential interaction, that won't entirely be a problem, but as it stands I haven't seen you on when I'm on and checking the server player list when I'm offline, I haven't seen you show up. What is your timezone? When are you normally on? Do you work?

I genuinely recommend you touch up on the RP example by expanding it at least to the minimum line requirement and fix the setting errors. As for the backstory, I recommend focusing on just his background and not a super specific moment.

Ive had 100 views on this piece of trash. wow. im suprised.

111 now. this is sad.